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The government should ban smoking in all public places, even though this would restrict some other people's freedoms. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

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It’s known that smoking is one of the most dangerous addictions in the world and has a negative impact on individuals' health. Some
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 believe that the authorities should ban smoking in public places, while others argue that it is a violation of their freedom. I completely agree with the idea that the government should impose strict restrictions on smoking in public places.
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 of all, smoking not only affects smokers but
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 affects non-smoker
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.
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, a person who has never smoked before is exposed to a massive amount of smoke air in public locations. When they inhale
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 air into their body, their body gets full of
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 harmful smoke.
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 may lead to vital damage to their respiratory systems and even getting cancer.
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, there should be strict rules about public smoking.
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, smoking in public areas can affect the environment negatively.
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 use a lighter to activate their cigarettes and inappropriate use of a lighter or a burned cigarette can result in a fire.
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, animals that live outside can be affected by smoke. Cigarettes consist of many harmful chemicals, and when
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 throw used-up cigarettes outside, many types of animals are exposed to these chemicals, which may lead to the extinction of their species in the long term. In conclusion,
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 some
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 believe that a smoking ban in public areas is a violation of their freedoms, I think that society's health and environmental protection are more important than freedom.
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, the government should ban smoking in all common places.
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