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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the most controversial issues facing
todays
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today's
today
 world is whether people who haven't pursued University should be paid equally to
them
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 who have a
high level
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 degree. In
this
 essay shall I discuss both perspectives.
Firstly
, a person who has a degree
has
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spend
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a
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numerous
time
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 of
his
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 life studying and has worked really hard to achieve that level.
Therefore
, having a good job with a high salary justifies all the effort. On the other side, physical work doesn't require academic knowledge, as long as you have the right skills to do the work. In
this
 case, they don't have to go to school and spend their time studying. Most
of
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physical
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the physical
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 jobs just require a short training or course so you can start practising until you understand how to properly do the profession you have chosen. In my opinion, a physical job might be harder to do,
however
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 people with a degree should be paid more because they have put
a
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lot of effort,
such
 as time and money to be ready for
this
.
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