Some people think it is no longer necessary for children to go to school because they can do all their learning online. Others believe learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The usage of technology in
education
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has come a long way causing virtual
education
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possible for everyone including
children
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almost everywhere around the world.
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, there are still some people who believe attending
school
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is paramount.
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essay will consider both views and why I think
kids
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should attend
school
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to build their social skills and prevent depression and isolation. According to the
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group, online learning is more
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and less stressful for
kids
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. It is clear that when
kids
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do not have to get to
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, they can sleep more, have their breakfast at home and start their class in the comfort of their room.
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, they do not need to wear formal cloth or uniform which make them be more relax.
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, parents
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will be more comfortable not having to drag their
children
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out of bed and be worried about traffic around
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or being late for work.
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, others think that youngsters have to attend
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fully
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education
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. If
kids
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are left on their own with their devices, who can guarantee they will log in to their classroom
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There are so many other fun activities that can distract
kids
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online and prevent them from being in their virtual classroom. Instant, famous platforms like Instagram, Facebook, Tick Toc,
Youtube
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and Youtube
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can be more entertaining and distracting for a child who has no supervised online
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.
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, some youngers can not be left alone at home if their parents are at work.
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, it is not practical for young
children
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and distracting for others without having someone to control attendance. In my view,
children
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should be present in
school
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to build their social skills by interacting with each other and adults.
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is a paramount skill that can be learnt only by being among others. When
kids
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are staying home all day in front of the screen they can not socialize and enjoy each other presence.
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, not having physical contact is one of the most important causes of depression and isolation which can be prevented by having in-person contact at
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • customizable learning pace
  • global connectivity
  • social skills development
  • self-discipline
  • unequal access to technology
  • structured environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • supervised learning
  • one-size-fits-all approach
  • peer pressure
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