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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In recent days advertising has become a good idea for promoting new
products
 and some
people
 say the
products
 do not need any advertisements if they are excellent in quality and quantity. some
people
 say advertisement is an easy way to promote various
products
 like cosmetics, food, clothes, and various things with good fame celebrities. most
people
 go with their own promoting ideas about their
products
 and sell for good profits. In
this
 competitive world, various companies are manufacturing different
products
 in the same category and advertising according to their view, selling the
products
 at their own prices. But the
people
 who are watching these advertisements are going and buying the
products
 without thinking about the cost and reviews of the
product
. according to my knowledge, advertising is a good thing in the recent world because advertising can save
our
Correct pronoun usage
us
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 time in many situations. but
people
 should not go and buy it blindly. before buying the
product
 we have to do research on the
products
 about the cost, quality, advantages, and side effects and should get information from the persons who are using the
product
 in their daily life in my daily life, I have experienced
this
 situation with my dearest friends who are very interested in cosmetics. they did not gather any information about the thing and went to get the
product
. after they had used they suffered a lot of skin problems and throw the
product
 without using it and simply
wasting
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wasted
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of
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apply
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money.so I can suggest not to discuss the advertisements and you should be very known about the various things that you are using.
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