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Today more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is positive or negative development? Why?

#people #robots #tasks #home #work #development
These days, the importance of using
robots
are
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 increasing step by step. The majority of
the
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people are using
robots
 for household chores and industrial applications.
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Furthermore
, there are some drawbacks and merits. In
this
essey
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 will be discussed both sides. To start, in
these day
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 and age, androids are very popular in all
country
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countries
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. It is easy to use it. Most of the
hometasks
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home tasks
such
 as mopping, dishwashing and others. In some nations,
robots
are need
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 for working at
office
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.
For instance
, Amerika, France and Norway are suffering from a shortage of
staffs
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staff
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 and
robots
fulfil
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to fulfil
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 the demands of
tabaureres
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labourers
tabourets
 in the
reigon
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region
reason
. Despite
of
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this
 trend, in some states
persons
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people
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 are suffering
unemployment
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from unemployment
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.
Although
, the most alarming one is domestic nations
in
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 other words, India,
Pakistan
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and Pakistan
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 have more and more individuals and unemployment is increasing day by day.
Therefore
,
this
 kind of
produce
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products
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cause
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causes
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to
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the
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a
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numbur
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number
 of people without Jobs.
Besides
, it is not superior
compores
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compared
compares
 to individuals.
Moreover
, people have
many
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more
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 skills rather than
robots
. In conclusion, androids are one
og
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of
 the greatest inventions in the history of
mankink
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mankind
. In my opinion, they have made life much easier by helping at home
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