In most countries, prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree？
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countries
social dysfunctions. In variousChange noun form
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it is believed that prison is Add a comma
nation,
an
only effective solution to the problem of misdeeds, but many believe that it’s better to educate them for their greater Correct article usage
the
goods
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essay will provide all the relevant information as to which option is superior. Anti-social activities has been increasing in various region, there is a belief in society that every lawbreaker should be imprisoned and that this
is the optimal remedy to that issue in total disregards to
the level of crime they have committed. Change preposition
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there are various levels for criminal activities like
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abusers
, assaults, rapes and many more these are all unforgivable crimes which just cannot be solved by educating them these can only be resolved by prison time or some other major means. Replace the word
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, there are offenders who have performed
a felony once or maybe Verb problem
committed
few
times like burglary, forgery, bribery, Correct article usage
a few
drug
users these are the kinds who can be instructed and helped to become better people. Enlightenment for these kinds is Correct word choice
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better
option, they can learn from Add an article
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the better
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mistakes
other
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others
such
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casualties in future. Juvenile Change the quantifier
fewer
centers
and rehabilitation Change the spelling
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are available for their recoveries. In my conclusion, I will partially disagree that jail is the only effective option or Fix the agreement mistake
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education
is the only choice. I think it depends on the level of crime they have Correct word choice
that education
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