In most countries, prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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social dysfunctions. In various
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it is believed that prison is
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only effective solution to the problem of misdeeds, but many believe that it’s better to educate them for their greater
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essay will provide all the relevant information as to which option is superior. Anti-social activities has been increasing in various region, there is a belief in society that every lawbreaker should be imprisoned and that
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the level of crime they have committed.
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there are people who have committed grave harm to humanity like terrorism, homicides, child
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, assaults, rapes and many more these are all unforgivable crimes which just cannot be solved by educating them these can only be resolved by prison time or some other major means.
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a felony once or maybe
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times like burglary, forgery, bribery,
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users these are the kinds who can be instructed and helped to become better people. Enlightenment for these kinds is
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option, they can learn from
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mistake
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and teach
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to not perform
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acts as it can lead to
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casualties in future. Juvenile
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and rehabilitation
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are available for their recoveries. In my conclusion, I will partially disagree that jail is the only effective option or
education
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is the only choice. I think it depends on the level of crime they have
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