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Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is arguably believed that nowadays
people
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 tend to be rather reluctant
of upholding
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 long-established
traditions
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.
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, there is a considerable number of
people
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 who believe instilling deep-rooted
cultures
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 and
traditions
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 is vital.
This
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 essay will examine both views dividedly and
argues
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in
the
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favor of the latter.
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 with, Considering the fact
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 culture and
traditions
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 can be fluid and forever changing, it is inevitable to give in to the vanishing of some.
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, it
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 appears that in the modern
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people
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 don’t appear as willing to preserve
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cultures
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 as they used to do ages ago and
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duo
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due
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 to
fostering
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the fostering
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 of youth culture. Seemingly, the newly established
cultures
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 developed by new generations hold
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substantial sway over how
traditions
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 are rarely kept.
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, the initiating gap between the set of values
people
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 are currently undergoing is rather unacceptable and inconvenient to adopt and is potentially raising conflict.
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,
cultures
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 instill an invisible bonding that ties
people
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 together,
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and bring
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bring
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 joy, uniformity and harmony to
people
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’s lives which if eliminated fully, can lay stages for cultural diversity, negligence and division.
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, the annual ceremonies like
new year
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 or Christmas
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 significant since
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spreads
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 limitless joy and
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away despair of the mundane. In my perspective, making
realistic
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a realistic
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 effort to uphold cultural values and
traditions
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 is crucial.
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, exhorting society to stick rigidly to it is questioning
people
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’s
value
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values
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and
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Thus
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, the entire meaning of tradition falls under question and preserving cultural myths and ancient ethics just for the sake of preserving them will not be promising.
To conclude
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, even though there are several aspects in which we can all agree is absolutely vital to keep
traditions
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 alive, forcefully and prejudicially tying ourselves to them is not the answer
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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