Some people believe that reading stories form a book is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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a belief
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in
the
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society that reading
story
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storybooks
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books
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is better than watching tv or playing computer
games
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for children. I believe there are two coincides. There are health benefits
in
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spending more time with
books
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than LED
screens
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.
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,
screens
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of
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television
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and computers
bad
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are bad
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for kids' eyes.
On the other hand
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,
books
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are stimulated child's
imaginary
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imagination
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skills.
Furthermore
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, computer
games
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and
television
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programs are made
children
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for children
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to addiction them.
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is
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directly
influence
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influences
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to
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by
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their mental health and brain development. Some little ones keep eating
while
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look
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looking
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at
screens
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. That
make
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makes
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their weight gain.
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Also
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it is
major
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a major
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health issue
between
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among
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children nowadays.
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, I suppose reading
books
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are healthy than watching
at
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apply
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screens
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.
In addition
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to
above
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the above
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, there are some video
games
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that are not good for kids. Most of them
are
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spread violence and
also
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there are inappropriate visuals. When kids are playing
on screen
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on-screen
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games
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, parents should keep
attention
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their attention
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on
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to
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them thoroughly.
As well as
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video
games
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, there are
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the same
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same
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some
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issues in
television
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programs.
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the time, when
child
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a child
the child
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keeps
habit
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the habit
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to
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of
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watching cartoons and movies on
screens
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. It's very hard to stop it.
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they become very aggressive and they could not control their anger.
According to
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above
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the above
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facts, there are more physical, mental and social impacts from screen addiction. In the summary, I believe reading
books
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are more healthy than
keep
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keeping
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eyes
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eye
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on
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television
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the television
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, computer or any other screen.
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