IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2.5

Some people are happy to spend their whole life living in the same area. Others prefer to live in many different places in their lifetime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #life #area #places #lifetime
Few individuals
beleive
Correct your spelling
live
 spending
his
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
life
 in
same
Change the article
the same
show examples
 area mostly
prefer
Correct subject-verb agreement
prefers
show examples
lived
Change the verb form
to live
show examples
different
Change preposition
in different
show examples
 places in their
life
.
Firstly
 good
realations
Correct your spelling
relations
 with
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
 places prisons.
Secondly
, they big goal
acheive
Correct your spelling
achieve
achieved
 in their
life
.
To begin
 with, When they lived in his place, Good behaviour with all individuals in their colony.
For example
 where I
am
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
live in
this
 area,who, respect provide all the persons and talking with each other. Yet, some new
people
 come here
in
Change preposition
into
show examples
 our society we
talking
Wrong verb form
talk
show examples
 and respect to them we know about he is what kind of person. So as to,
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
provide to ourselves respect and create
relationship
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
show examples
. Sometimes when we are going to another work our neighbour
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
show examples
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
ourselves
Correct pronoun usage
us
show examples
.
Moreover
,
while
, some
people's
Change noun form
people
show examples
 are very high
think
Correct your spelling
thing
show examples
 in his
life
 and they
acheive
Correct your spelling
achieve
 their goals to
lived
Change the form of the verb
live
show examples
 in other cities.
For example
, so, earn good money in their
life
 who they good
life
spending
Change the form of the verb
spent
show examples
 in
his
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
life
 and changed the family background. How
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 good condition lives in their family all the time very happily feel in his
life
 and good education received in their
childrens
Correct your spelling
children
children's
.When
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
people
 in poverty change living places and earn more and more money in
his
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
life
. In conclusion.some
people
 are living with others
persons
Replace the word
people
show examples
 in
same
Change the article
the same
show examples
 area they prefer and feel good.But, mostly goes abroad
spending
Wrong verb form
spend
show examples
 high lifestyle.
Submitted by mahasingh1154 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Belonging
  • Community
  • Social connections
  • Local environment
  • Resources
  • Limited exposure
  • Different cultures
  • Experiences
  • Stagnation
  • Complacency
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Diverse cultures
  • Perspectives
  • Adaptability
  • Flexibility
  • Stability
  • Roots
  • Long-lasting relationships
  • Adjustment
  • New environments
  • Balanced approach
What to do next:
Look at other essays: