some people believe that traditional medicines such as herbal medicines or acupuncture are more benefit than modern medicines

Traditional

medicine

is growing in popularity and many people are now using methods

such

as acupuncture and herbal medicines to maintain and strengthen their health. Many of those who have experienced traditional

medicine

believe that it is more effective than modern

medicine

. I completely disagree with

this

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points Modern

medicine

has many advantages over traditional

medicines

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.

Firstly

, modern

medicine

is fast and effective because drugs are designed to treat problems immediately.

On the other hand

, traditional

medicine

is slow and does not work very well. Medical research shows that

headache

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would go away after an hour

from

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of

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using drugs,

while

it would take longer hours for patients to use herbal remedies.

In addition

, modern

medicine

is constantly being developed and improved,

such

as

researching

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to find a cure for cancer, AIDS or other fatal diseases.

However

, traditional

medicine

only uses old knowledge and techniques to treat patients.

Furthermore

, it depends on natural ingredients like herbs and other plants that might disappear. Another important point is that modern

medicine

is strictly controlled by

government

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to ensure high standards

or

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quality. In Vietnam,

for instance

,

becoming

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a doctor or pharmacist, he/she

need

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to study at medical

universities

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at

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for at

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least seven years,

whereas

, anyone

also

can open their own traditional

medicine

clinics. Recent media report that some herbal medicines are ineffective by causing a detrimental impact on individuals using

it

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.

To sum up

, traditional

medicine

relies on natural ingredients and does not work for everyone,

while

modern

medicine

is fast, safe and constantly renovated.

Thus

, I believe that it is far better to maintain

overall

health.