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One of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
In recent years,
countries
 are more dependent on fuels for
vehicles
.
Due to
this
 human intervention, environmental
problems
 can not be denied.I strongly agree that
increase
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 in the cost of fuel will
sove
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solve
save
move
 environmental
problems
while
 some will argue
on
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about
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 that. In many
countries
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,countries
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 people are not aware of
harmful
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the harmful
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effect
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effects
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from
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of
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vehicles
.
For example
,
countries
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in countries
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 like India, people mostly prefer
own
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their own
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vehicle
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a vehicle
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 rather than public
transport
 to travel. If fuel price is raised, they will stop using
personel
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personal
vehicles
 and start using public
transport
,
such
 as
bus
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the bus
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, metro etc. I believe if we want to stop
harmful
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the harmful
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emission
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emissions
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 of gases , we have to regulate strict instructions.
Additionaly
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Additionally
Additional
, if you observed developed
countries
 like Singapore, these laws are implemented. developing
countries
 should learn from these
countries
 to save traffic , sound pollution,
air
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and air
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 pollution.
as a result
, our environment will be neat and clean.
On the other hand
, we can provide
another protentional solutions
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another protentional solution
other protentional solutions
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 to address environmental
problems
. For
instances
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instance
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,
rise
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a rise
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 in petrol price
lead
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leads
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 to inflation, In order to facilitate environmental
problems
.
furthermore
, we can implement various schemes,
such
 as
Firstly
, Odd-even number vehicle laws, In
this
 law, Odd
vehicles
 are run on odd days and vice versa,
Secondly
, We can
also
 reduce public
transport
 prices to attract people. In conclusion, developing
countries
 should not rush to implement these laws, they can take
calculated
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a calculated
the calculated
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risk
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risks
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 to ensure benefits outweigh the negative impacts. we can aware public about
benefits
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the benefits
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 of usage of public
transport
.
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