Overpopulation of urban areas has created a number of problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems? Give your reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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The population has been incredibly increasing these years around the world and now
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trend is not only happening in the city but
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in urban
areas
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. Overpopulation has attracted
people
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's attention as it caused several problems
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as the shortage of education resources and
traffic
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. In order to deal with
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problemissue
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problem issue
, there are two suggestions. Nowadays,
people
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are choosing to live in
urban
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the urban
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field
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fields
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for a better environment and less working pressure. ,
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However
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this
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makes these places become more and more crowded. schooling resources in
urban
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the urban
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range
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ranges
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such
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as elementary and junior high
school
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schools
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are fragile generally, it can just normally meet the demand of local residents. Children may face a challenge in attending school if there are too many
folk
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around their age living in the same suburb. In my opinion, building more
school
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schools
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is very necessary.
Due to
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overpopulation in urban
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has become a new trend, schooling resources should be
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equipped in
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places to better serve
people
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living there. The
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headache
is transport
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. Most
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people
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living in
urban
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the urban
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field are willing to drive to work,
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which
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causes the
traffic
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situation is getting worse and worse as the width of lanes in these
areas
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can not support all of these vehicles. In order to solve
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problem, improving public transportation is my suggestion. the government need to build more bus stop and train station in these places to meet
people
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's demand for travelling.
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,
people
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are more willing to choose to use public transportation as it's cheap and convenient so the
traffic
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situation can become better. In conclusion, the government need to pay more attention to overpopulation in urban
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as local residents are suffering from a variety of problems
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as education and terrible
traffic
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.
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, building more schools and a better public transport system is very necessary now.
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