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Band 8.5

You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter -say what the participants liked about the hotel -explain why they were unhappy about the food -Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 email to express my concern regarding the service we received at your hotel, The Prestige. First of all, our whole staff truly liked the hotel, especially the ambience. It was so beautiful that we were mesmerized by its architecture and design.
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, your staff members were well behaved and extremely polite.
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, some of our team members were not happy regarding the dishes served during lunchtime and complained about the lack of non-vegetarian options. There were only two chicken courses and not even a single fish dish.
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, it would be great if you could revise the lunch menu to include a few more non-vegetarian recipes to create a balance between veg and non-veg.
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, I recommend including a biryani dish as well, which is one of the most famous recipes in the world. Thank you for your hospitality, and I look forward to visiting your hotel in the future. Yours faithfully, Raman Kumar

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down sections more distinctly for easier readability. Generally, separate ideas into paragraphs for clarity.
task response
Slightly expand on how the ambiance benefitted the meeting to strengthen task response.
task response
The letter addresses all parts of the task effectively: what participants liked, dissatisfaction with the food, and suggestions for improvement.
suitable writing tone
The tone is polite and professional, suitable for correspondence with a hotel manager.
coherence and cohesion
Overall, the letter flows well with a clear beginning, middle, and end, making it easy to understand.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to express my thanks and also to share some feedback.
  • The participants were very pleased with the venue.
  • The meeting room was spacious, clean, and comfortable.
  • Your staff were friendly, polite, and helpful throughout the day.
  • The hotel was in a good location and easy to find.
  • However, many guests were disappointed with the lunch.
  • The food was cold and lacked variety.
  • There were not enough options for vegetarian guests.
  • The quality of the meal did not match our expectations.
  • I would suggest offering fresher, hotter food in future.
  • It would also help to provide a wider range of dishes.
  • Please ask organisers about special food needs before the event.
  • I hope you will consider these suggestions for future meetings.
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