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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The young generation has a vital role in future of the societies;
Therefore
, government authorities have provided a lot of training programs for them in the past few years. Unpaid community services have been a subject of debate in recent decades. Some people opine
this
 type of
work
 should be compulsory for offspring who are in high
school
 levels. I side with
this
 opinion but not strongly. In
this
 essay, I will explain in detail how far I agree or disagree with
this
 issue. Some people believe that unpaid jobs should be a compulsory section of high
school
 courses because juveniles are really fresh to do it at
this
 age.
Also
, they do not need to be paid for their
work
 as they have financially supported by their families.
This
 kind of job can prepare them for their future careers.
For example
, children can
work
 in charities to help poor people
as well as
 they can help the elderly with their chores. In some cases, youth
work
 for some companies and donate their incomes to the poor.
On the other hand
, if there is only one reason for me to disagree with
this
 point of view, it is poverty. As some research has shown,70% of families are underprivileged.
Hence
, most of the children need to be paid to support their families.
Thus
, they have to find a job with a salary since they are in high
school
. In a nutshell, unpaid jobs as a compulsory part of high
school
 levels help children to be prepared for their future
career
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, but most of the kids prefer to get paid for their activities to aid their parents. I almost agree with the former opinion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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