As global trade increases,many goods , including those we use on daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance. Do the benefit of this trends outweigh its drawback?

It is indisputable fact that nowadays
people
choose some products from other countries.
This
pattern might
beneficial
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for the population
that
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able
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to outweigh its drawback.
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essay will discuss
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both positive and negative impacts and the writer believes that
convience
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convenience
will surpass the hitch. To commence with, there are several reasons why the trend of
world-wide
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trade has some detrimental effects. The first one is
people
will take a charge of postage
fee
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fees
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, resulting in higher costs than usual.
Furthermore
, there are some risks in the packages presumably,
such
as broken items, and
stuck
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at customs. The packages will be delayed because of the long distance. Another point to consider is the advantages of the trend which may able to ease the disadvantages. If
people
get
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imported items, they will sell
it
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to
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other
people
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high-quality but low-price goods.
Secondly
, it can prevent
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inflation
from
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the
country
. It might
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because in there are overpriced in the
country
.
Thirdly
, it can improve the technology
from
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the
country
, because the
country
can't make the products.
According to
this
, the imported items can
fulfill
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the domestic demands that cannot
being
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created. They will achieve raw materials, semi-finished goods, or finished goods that
able
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to complete the
finish
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product.
For example
, if the public imports iron and steel bars, the construction of
building
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will be upgraded.
To sum up
,
while
importing has so many
weakness
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, it
also
has profit related to the price, inflation and technology. The advantages will surpass the disadvantages of the trend.
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  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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