In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

While
some citizens advocate
to expend
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a huge amount of funding on building new
railways
which are used for very fast
trains
between
two
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cities, others think
the
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apply
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improving current public
transport
is better.
Although
a number of benefits in
run
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running
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new fas-speed
trains
, I believe developing existing public
transport
infrastructures could be important On the one hand, it is logical that some
people
thought that new
railways
leading to new and fast
trains
are necessary. There is no doubt that speed is one of the most important characteristics of our fast-changing world.
This
issue will get
importance
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when it comes to
transfer
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people
between two cities where
it's
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its
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inhabitants tend to commute. Their
travel's
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time is reduced and so it can play an important role in day-to-day life. Those
trains
that
is
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very fast compared to current
trains
, will not move on the existing railway lines,
thus
needing to
new
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the new
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foundation is crucial. Japan,
for example
, which is known as a pioneer country in
this
topic, has built new
railways
that bring about
surge
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in transportation speed.
On the other hand
, there are some compelling reasons that the most funding should be allocated
on
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improving public
transport
that
used
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is used
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currently by many
people
.
Firstly
, it is so cheaper as opposed to
build
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building
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new
railways
because
it's
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its
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infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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is exist and
it's create
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situation
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a situation
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leading to
spend
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less money.
Secondly
, current means of public transportation
is
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are
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receiving currency and using them do not need to teach new instructions to
people
.
Finally
, improving existing public
transport
could be finished as soon as
constructing
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new
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railways
. Take common public means as an example; replacing old buses with
new
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a new
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one
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ones
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is cheaper, faster and more convenient than
run
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a run
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high-speed
train
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trains
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. In conclusion, there are two opposing views on
this
trend, some
people
believe that constructing new
railways
is
vaital
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vital
, others think that improving public
transport
infrastructures is better, I personally take the letter view on the basis increase the speed of
contruction
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construction
and reduce costs.
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