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Some people say history is one of the most important school subject. Other people thik that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some say in high
school
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history
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 is the most important
subject
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 to study. Others say
subjects
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 like science and
technology
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 would be useful in the future. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and describe my opinion. In high
school
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,
students
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 spent most of their time getting basic knowledge.
Subjects
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 like
history
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 can help to get a real sense to own nationality. In my opinion,
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 a very important
subject
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 to prepare
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 an educated individual for the world.
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, in my country, all of the
students
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 read 'The Mongolian Secret
History
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' and 'Genghis Khan'.
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 that all of our citizens have plenty of knowledge to make conversation about our
history
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.
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, science-based
subjects
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 like chemistry, physics, and
technology
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 are more complicated and hard to understand. I would argue that
students
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 should learn these types of lessons in college.
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, memorizing a formula, and solving one is stressful, almost all of the
students
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 hate chemistry, and they usually don't get good grades in
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subjects
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. And in our
technology
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 era, everyone has significant knowledge of how to use gadgets.
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technology
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subject
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 wouldn't be necessary. In summary,
history
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 is an important
subject
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 to learn in high
school
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, because
history
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 books are full of satisfying stories to make a conversation anywhere in the world. But science and
technology
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 lessons are hard to get
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 and getting a good grade is often stressful. In my opinion,
history
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 is a very important
subject
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 to study in high
school
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 years.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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