-Some people believe that we should have a four-day working week and still be paid the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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perosn
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person

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working five
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a
week
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for long hours for a
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private

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company or the
goverment
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government

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is
norma
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normal

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everyones
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everyone's

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dream
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dreams

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life
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of life

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.But chuck of people
argue
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argues

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that
,
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apply

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working
days
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shoould
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should

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be reduce
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be reduced
be reducing

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to four and should get
same
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the same

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salary. And I totally agree with
thme
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them
that
theme

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, because of
myriad
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the myriad

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benifits
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benefits

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not
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,not

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just
foe
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for

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the comapany

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comapany
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company

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but
also
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for
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the employee
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employee
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employees

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.
Further
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,
passage
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the passage
a passage

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will elaborate details of
this
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statement. To knock off, advantages for companies, if four
days
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week
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will start all around the world,
this
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can in my
opion
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opinion

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,
imporve
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improve

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the productivity of
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employee
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the employee
an employee

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.
Peoples'
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Peoples

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in
industry
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the industry

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can
work
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more
enthusiatically
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enthusiastically

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. Since
,
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apply

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they have to
work
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for
shorter
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a shorter

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time than traditionally they use to do and
reciving
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receiving

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the same salary.
This
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decision can
also
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be
benificial
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beneficial

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for companies if they make
law
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laws

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by
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in

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various
way
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ways

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.
Such
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as, if an
employee
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have
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has

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to
work
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just four
days
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per
week
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then
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, the electricity and other
expeneses
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expenses

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of it can be cut down drastically.
Where
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Whereas

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for just one
employee
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,
company
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the company
a company

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can save thousands of
ruppes
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rupees

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in a year which it can put
in
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into

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other thing
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another thing
other things

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.
This
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law is in consideration in the UAE, and citizens of that country are welcoming
this
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desicio
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decision

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.
In addition
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,
this
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law can encourage
many
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much

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youth
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youths

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to
work
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for private
or
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apply

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organisation
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organisations

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. Thinking about working
hour
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hours

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, and since youth can
work
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for
longer
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a longer

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period
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periods

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in
camparison
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comparison

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to
older
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the older
an older

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experienced
worker
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workers

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.
This
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can boost their production and can deliver their services faster.
However
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, there
are
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is

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some
drawback
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drawbacks

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of
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to

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this
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system.
For instance
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, companies have to pay
worker
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workers

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,
according to
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5
days
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Use synonyms
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week
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a week

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. And
this
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can cost them millions of
dollar
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dollars

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, putting pressure on
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the organistaion
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organistaion
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organisation

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.
Although
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,
this
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and some other disadvantages can
be outweigh
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be outweighed

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. In conclusion, I believe making 4
days
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Use synonyms
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week
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a week

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will totally be a good idea for both
the
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apply

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sides and minute drawbacks can be neglected since
,
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apply

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this
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is a win-win situation for everyone.

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