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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, public debate has been going on over whether schools give lessons to their students regarding how to be a good father or mother. I tend to believe that would be better
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 generations if their parents have good notions
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 their children - for the following reasons. Three main factors support the idea of
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 how to be a parent properly. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that more
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 about recently arrived parents
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 people would be
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crucial
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good health
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 year of life, and probably
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 parents would not have
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 reason for my belief is that good lessons
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 experienced teacher could motivate the class to be
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 a new generation with more instruction regarding not only laws
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 life. I admit that student's
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should
 be occupied with subjects to a professional path rather than other general themes, but as the number of
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 has increased the matter about it should be discussed. In conclusion, I would argue that schools should teach young people
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how to be a good
parent
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adviseble
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advisable
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government
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