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I some countries, people prefer to rent their home rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes?

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Globally, most people see
shelter
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the shelter
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 as
one
 of the basic needs of life. Some individuals prefer to lease their apartments than
purchasing
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one
.
This
 essay will be discussing the merits and demerits of renting homes.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons that make someone want to
rent
 a
house
, some of
this
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these
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involves
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involve
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 saving costs and focusing on other
projects
. When renting a
house
,
one
go
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goes
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 for what they can afford and maintain easily, thereby having some savings for other investments and
projects
.
For instance
, a person that
rent
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rents
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 a small
apartment
 can have enough
of
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money to plan their own business
due to
 the small amount spent on getting the
apartment
.
However
, if an individual decided to buy a
house
,
one
 may go bankrupt and stranded which may
also
afffect
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affect
 other plans. In order words, leasing a
house
 can give room for other investments and
projects
.
On the other hand
,
buy
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 a home is
ver
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very
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 expensive but comes with a lot of comfort and convenience, which
bring
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brings
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 about the disadvantages of renting a
house
.
Firstly
, there is no comfort and freedom from renting an
apartment
 because
one
 is living on someone else property,
therefore
 has to obey the rules and regulations that govern the place, unlike the freedom of being in
one
's own
house
.
Also
, in
a
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long-term
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long term
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, it is not advisable economically because the standard of living
increase
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increases
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 daily.
Hence
, there might be an increase in
rent
.
For instance
,
recent
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a recent
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 study has
showed
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shown
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 that 90% of homeless people are
due to
 the increasing economic and
rent
 which they can not afford.
However
,
this
 could have been avoided if they have their own home. In summary, renting a
house
 is not financially smart because of the long-time consequences but if it
for
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is for
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temporary
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a temporary
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purpose
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purposes
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, so
one
 can focus
in
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on
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 other
projects
then
 it is a good choice.
Hence
, deciding on purchasing an
apartment
 or leasing
one
 depends on
the
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apply
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future plans and budgets.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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