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Some people are happy to spend their whole life living in the same area. Others prefer to live in many different places in their lifetime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 say that
people
 can get more happiness to stay
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in a
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a
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the
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 same
area
.
However
, others prefer to move a lot of
plave
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places
 in their life span.
Hence
,
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 essay aims to elaborate on
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and discuss
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discuss
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 both
sides
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side's
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opinion
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opinions
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, and I describe my point of view. On the one hand, some
people
 who had gotten some advantages from their
residents
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resident's
residents'
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area
 have a likelihood to remain
their
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in their
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 living
are
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area
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.
This
 is because
,
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apply
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 it is possible to want to return
for
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to
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 their
reagion
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region
 to contribute
their
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to their
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 residents' business and so on. To illustrate, some of the populace, who continue to live in the same
area
, had gotten
touch
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in touch
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 with their citizens' kindness. In
this
 case,
people
 have
a
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the
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 possibility to decide to keep stay
in
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apply
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there.
On the other hand
, there are
people
 whose
personality
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personalities
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 are loving travel, so they may
hope
 to live
a
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in a
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lot of
kind
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kinds
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 of
place
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places
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.
This
 is because,
in
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these
people
, they want to meet new
people
 or to go
new
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to new
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 areas,
according to
 they are inclined to
changing
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change
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 their environments.
For example
, there is a fact that some tribes are existing, who are still changing their
residents
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resident's
residents'
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area
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areas
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,
such
 as nomads. From my perspective, as I described before a paragraph, it depends on a
persons
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person's
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 personality. Our society has mainly two
type
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types
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 of
people
, one
is prefer
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prefers
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 to stay
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in a
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a
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the
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 same
area
,
while
 others
hope
 to move.
Therefore
, it is a key to get happiness for
people
 that they should decide their own opinion
what
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and what
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 they
hope
. In conclusion, I reiterate that some
people
 love to stay living from the past because they want to contribute
their
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to their
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 local,
however
, others
also
 are existing who want to change their living
area
according to
they
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their
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 love
adventures
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of adventures
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.
Whereas
, I recommend that
people
 should decide what they
hope
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Belonging
  • Community
  • Social connections
  • Local environment
  • Resources
  • Limited exposure
  • Different cultures
  • Experiences
  • Stagnation
  • Complacency
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Diverse cultures
  • Perspectives
  • Adaptability
  • Flexibility
  • Stability
  • Roots
  • Long-lasting relationships
  • Adjustment
  • New environments
  • Balanced approach
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