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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

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Lately, the rise of illicit
drug
 abuse among
youth
 has come into
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
 using
drugs
 is normalized in all modern societies,
young
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the young
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 generation tends to experiment with legal and illegal
drugs
 even at an early age. In
this
essay
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 I will discuss the causes and effects of
this
 extensive
drug
 usage among youngsters in
the
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modern society.  Why is the
youth
 more vulnerable to
drug
 abuse?
Firstly
, the young mind is driven by curiosity. During
this
 stage, they are in need of companionship and
feeling
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 superior. So they can easily be persuaded into trying these
drugs
 by strangers or by their own peers.
This
 limitless curiosity may one day become the harbinger of many adverse effects on their life.
Secondly
, some may use higher dosages without their knowledge and might even
loose
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 their life.
For instance
, fentanyl overdose in the USA has skyrocketed among their
youth
 during the past year and most deaths were
in
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first time
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 users. To prevent
the
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young adolescents from obtaining certain
drugs
 like Oxycodone and Fentanyl,
medical
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a medical
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presciption
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prescription
 system should be introduced to the pharmacies.
Then
, only the ones who are actually in need will be able to access these types of
drugs
, not children. Even
the
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legal
drugs
 like cough syrup in large quantities can be harmful too. So there should be proper supervision to find out who
recieves
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receives
 the
drugs
. 
Consequently
, if we can arrange a few visits to see
drug
 addicts in reformation
centers
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, we can let students experience
repercussions
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the repercussions
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drugs
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of drugs
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. If we can educate the
youth
 about the
drugs
such
 as
heroine
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heroin
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, methadone, and their respective side effects,
then
 we can reduce the formation of new
drug
 users.
Overall
, fighting the battle of
drug
 abuse in the
youth
 is getting harder and harder
everyday
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 but it is our duty to save them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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