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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
In
this
 contemporary
world
, more
that
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than
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thausand
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thousand
thousands
 of
languages
 use to communicate by showing their uniqueness. Most of them try to learn these different types of vocal
sound
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sounds
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 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their needs and desires. Especially, those who love travelling and working in different
kind
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kinds
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 of areas. I suppose that only for these things but
also
 we apply foreign
languages
 for various things.
According to
 my view, youngsters like to do their higher studies away from their motherland to experience
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a multi-cultural
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multi-cultural
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multicultural
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 society and achieve their personal goals.
On the other hand
, they can earn money
while
 studying
their
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apply
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, if they
fluent
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are fluent
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 in
native
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the native
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language
 where they live for studies. For
an
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apply
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example,
student
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a student
the student
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 who
desire
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desires
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 to
entir
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enter
 as
a
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an
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 international student
in
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at
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 a
world famous
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world-famous
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 university, definitely he or
she
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apply
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has to show their
language
 proficiency by doing IELTS.
Moreover
, we are
human-beings
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human beings
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 who can not live alone
this
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in this
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 global
world
.
As a result
 of
that
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,that
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 we have to communicate with other nations to build up and continue a good
relationship
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relationships
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. For an instance, political leaders who maintain connections with other countries must know
few
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a few
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language
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languages
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 to keep political with them,
otherwise
, miscommunication will make a huge disaster. To contrast, most
of
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apply
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European
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the European
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 travel as a
lesuire
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leisure
 activity during
winter
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the winter
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 season, so they use their
language
 skills for that.
Furthermore
, everyone needs money, so people do their jobs with multi-national communities,
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and they
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they
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apply
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also
 need
this
 skill. These are
main
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the main
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 reasons for using foreign
languages
.
To sum up
, I can conclude that though we use different
languages
 for our career path and
travelling
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travel
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 around the
world
, there are more reasons
also
 connected with choosing it and it
depend
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depends
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 on the individual needs
as well as
 social needs.
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