You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs describe your new job tell him/her your other news

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Dear John, I'm thrilled to tell you that I have now started working as a Senior Software Developer for a new start-up company. As you know, I've been working at a bank for the

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couple of years now. Working in a corporate environment limits me to only work on some specific areas of the development process.

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, I was looking for a challenging role where I could create applications end-to-end.

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, I found a new role at a start-up company where I have more responsibility in the development lifecycle.

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senior position not only includes, taking care of technical parts

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involves gathering user requirements by conducting surveys to address the specific pain points of the users.

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lets me decide the look and feel of the application which was not a part of the previous job. Of course, the salary band has increased, too. And

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, I visited the Banff National Park

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fall, for which I was waiting for almost a year. I must say the natural beauty is amazing. I would highly recommend visiting it once, you would love it! Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Keep in touch. Vaibhav

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coherence and cohesion

Consider breaking down longer sentences to improve readability.

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Make sure to include a more personal touch to your news about visiting the Banff National Park, perhaps by mentioning a specific activity you enjoyed.

coherence and cohesion

The letter has a clear structure with a logical flow of ideas, making it easy to follow.

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You maintained a friendly and engaging writing tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

198 words

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