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With the rise of ebooks comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good forward step while others do not. What are advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#rise #ebooks #decline #paper #books #people #step #trend
The technological revolution caused some major changes in the shape of our
life
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, like the way of reading, it is argued that
the
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electronic
books
 made
people
 dump
paper
books
,
this
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discusses
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 the benefits of the modern way of reading
as well as
 its bad effects.
Firstly
,
ebook
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ebooks
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 made the life of
the
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knwoledge
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knowledge
 seekers easier, In the past,
people
 used to visit the library and go through a complex
books
 borrowing process, which consumes their time and effort,
in addition
, electronic
books
 help
people
 in solving the problem of finding a space for their
books
,
for example
, today all the individual has to do is to download the book he wants from the Internet on his
laptob
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laptop
 or Ibad
instead
 of buying a bunch of
books
 and
then
 suffer to find a place for it.
On the other hand
, these ebooks lead
people
 to some
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 health issues, like complaining about eyes pain because of
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harm
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radiations
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 become from the screens of computers, publishers
also
 have some concerns about the way
people
 get
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 of
books
,
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 since the Internet is full with stolen copies that a student can install without buying a penny, elderly
people
 can become bothered of holding a
laptob
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laptop
 idea and start reading from it, they believe that
paper
books
 as heritage and good habit that they don't want to abandon, so when the market
start
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 running out of
paper
books
this
 could annoying them. In
conclution
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conclusion
, governments and authorities should provide
people
 with both types of reading, and find the right place for saving
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paper
books
 as their value will increase with the drop in their numbers, but at the same time,
their
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 should be
a
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hard work to convert priceless
books
 to ebooks to keep them from
lost
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loss
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.
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