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Being a celebrity brings problems as well as benefits

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In nowadays, many
people
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 tend to be well-known, more than ever.
while
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 the majority of the worldwide population believes that being famous is the ultimate gain, some may oppose it. In
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 essay, I will examine both the advantages and disadvantages of being renowned and explain why being famous is a fascinating idea. first of all, being popular means your life is no longer yours.
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 absent of privacy,
people
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 tend to hear the news of actors, football players, etc. And imitate them as well. So, well-known
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 will suffer a lack of privacy, their life details are news headlines.
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, everyone on the planet heard about Johnny Deep's court.
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, famous
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 be under pressure more than others, emotionally and even physically,
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 they must be active and effective all the time, they undergo emotional problems which sometimes lead to committing suicide, a clear example, is what happened in Lebanon to the famous actor nancy, who found dead after throwing herself from the 5th floor as police reported, sadly.
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, being well known means rich, of course, the known faces always be used in commercial announcements,
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, more money,
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, Robert John, who made a fortune equal to 2 million, just from advertisements, despite the fortune that popular
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 can make, the influence is crucial, of course, well-known
people
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 are a trend,
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 they are idols for other
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, as an example, in the
last
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 movie of the Ukrainian actor Ihor, after he shows himself in a new style of clothes,
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 day, the young
people
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 of Ukraine chase all clothes shop, just to buy same clothes style as he. in conclusion, the majority of population chase the fame, despite the drawbacks of being a well-known person, I believe being famous, brings numerous benefits.
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