Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views.

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a significant proportion of

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the family

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family

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budget

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celebrations

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there is an

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point of view,that it is a squander.I am inclined to agree with the first statement, as

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gathering all together on holidays people create

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warmhearted

memories ,which stay with them forever. Festival time is considered to be the most

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one. It might appear to be astronomically expensive to organise Christmas or

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with relatives.

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, these holidays are the best opportunities to have

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a meal

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meal

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with family members, spend time together and strengthen relationships, as during the year it might be inconvenient for everybody, especially if everyone lives far from each other.

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, it is

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important for children to meet other relatives, which creates the feeling of unity,love and support.

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,there was a survey conducted in Ukrainian universities among students, which demonstrated,that the best memories from childhood were connected with family

celebrations

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it might appear to be an arduous task to make a whole family meal, as their income is not enough to do it.

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, it is more necessary for them to pay bills and medical insurance,rather than waste money on

celebrations

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others

,who could afford

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, sometimes avoid family

celebrations

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negatively affects their relationships with relatives and friends.

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all of the above, it

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important to have family

celebrations

,as it is a way to improve and build up family connections and I completely

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agree

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it should not create a burden or pressure on those,who cannot afford it.

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1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

cherish
nurture
strengthen
bond
create memories
enjoyment
sense of belonging
reconnect
unite
traditions
create traditions
financial burden
priorities
moderation
budget
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