Some people believe that violent media directly results in violent behavior. To what ecpend do you agree or disagree?

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Some citizens tend to think that harsh media directly result in aggressive

behavior

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. I totally agree with

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statement because

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news

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proyect

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projects

too much

violence

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in their morning information and

radio

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shows interview citizens who had fights at nightclubs. One reason is that many

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programs

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are addicted to

present

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aggressive information that reveals too

much

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many

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details of an accident because they want to catch people's attention.

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, they select a piece of the

news

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where

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which

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there are drastic pictures or obscene words to impact

audience

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the audience

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and increase their

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raitings

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ratings

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, many of these

programs

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contact people who suffer from a violent situation or disease and they record them in hospitals or

prisions

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prisons

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, adults might be affected

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their

hebaviors

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behaviours

due to

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see

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seeing

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too much

violence

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on daily basis.

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Fox 11

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apply

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is well-known to present explicit information about

accident

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accidents

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regaldless

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regardless

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this

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is morning time, and society is

accostum

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accustom

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searching

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for

these

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this

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type

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types

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news

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. Another reason is that many

radio

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programs

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tend to interview young adults who had recently fought at nightclubs and these interviews are extended even for a week.

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this

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, the

radio

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announcer

make

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fun of these vulnerable situations that

negativelly

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negatively

influence teenagers'

behavior

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behaviour

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because they believe

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is a funny situation.

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, these teens suppose that all these negative events are normal in

today

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society and they conduct themselves in a violent way as normal. To explain

further

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, Channel 13 Los Angeles has

high

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audience because they record people at nightclubs who had been

cheeted

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cheated

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their couples, and

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bring

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a lot of

audience

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, I strongly believe

violence

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lead

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leads

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violence

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to violence

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, and all the things an individual sees might affect their

behavior

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behaviour

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soon or later. What is worse is that young generations are growing up believing

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is a normal situation because many

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and

radio

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programs

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spreads

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these

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type of

news

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

320 words

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