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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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To diminish
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 the number of crimes, some
people
 believe that lengthening the
punishment
 will be the best solution.
However
,
although
this
 approach is impactful for a
crime
, other ways may be more effective to eradicate rampant crimes. Given
this
 situation, another way
such
 as social
punishment
 should have been enacted to decrease the number of crimes. To commence
with
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, there are positive and negative consequences
by
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of
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 enacting
the
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apply
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extended
punishment
 for
prisoners
.
Firstly
, In terms of
positive
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the positive
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 side, the criminal will have
less
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fewer
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 possibilities for doing a
crime
. If the
prisoners
 are burdened by
longer
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a longer
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 duration of
penalty
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the penalty
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, they may
spent
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 much of their life in cells.
Then
, these
people
 might be freed when they are old and there is no time for them to recommit
crime
 again.
Nevertheless
, the negative side is that jails will probably not be able to accommodate these
crime
 actors at the same time. If they are jailed for a long time, it will disturb jail
regulation
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regulations
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 which can impact the jail being full and there will be
not
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no
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 available cells for new
prisoners
. Another alternative
such
 as
social
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a social
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 penalty might give
more
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a more
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 significant effect. Unlike giving longer sentences
for
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to
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prisoners
, social
punishment
 can give a deterrent effect.
For example
, after
people
 who commit a
crime
being
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 freed, their surroundings will give
a
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social pressure
then
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and then
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 make them feel guilty.
Consequently
,
this
 way can give a traumatic effect
for
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on
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 doing
crime
 and effectively reduce the risk of
crime
.
However
,
this
 method cannot always work because it depends on
their
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environment
. If the
environment
 is good, the social
punishment
 will be enforced, but when the
environment
 is full of
apatise
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apatite
people
, it might not work
As a result
, an added penalty can decrease
the
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crime
 but there is another way
that is
 more effective
such
 as
punishment
 by the
environment
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 of
criminal
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criminals
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. Given
this
 situation, the government should support social
social
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punishment
 by showing
prisoners'
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prisoners
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 guilty in public and
make
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making
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 them
regret
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itregret
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.
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