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Nowadays, more and more people decided to have a children at later age what do you think major reason for this do advantages of this trend out with disadvantages

In today's transforming epoch, the nuclear family
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 a trend
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 more and more masses prefer to have offspring at the late 30
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. I have given some reasons and I have discussed the advantages in the forthcoming paragraph To commence with the reasons, first and foremost, in late hood people do not have the ability to discriminate what a good and wrong for their life .
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, late adulthood masses have started to earn
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, they do not a sufficient to manage their earning in the family
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 many many kinds preferred to marriage at a late
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 because they know in the late adolescence
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 they not to fully mature .
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 ,having
children
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 at an early
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 limits many constitutions
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 as mentally stress at the starting
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 not able to cure the offspring and
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 they can face financial crisis through having
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children
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children
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 at all
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 because it early
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 many people are starting to earn
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 in on that time they do not have enough financially to full field any needs of offspring Taking into account the disadvantages of
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 phenomenon.First every mankind and have
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maturity and because of
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 they are able to pure their offspring without any query.
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other
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hands
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,at a later
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age
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 people are sufficient to manage their all family without any crisis .
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, one person who started earning
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 early
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to
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 later
age
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 they have able to get
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sufficient
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 management which full feel
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 all family need. In conclusion ,having hair at an early
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 limits many causes for any couple
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 as poor care of
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 financially low
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 it has
a
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many benefits for
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couple
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 who have
offering
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 at
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literature
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 better care of
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 and high safety for
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