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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign language for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Language
 is one of the essential subjects in schools. Nowadays, some institutions incorporate a
second
language
in addition
 to their primary school curriculum. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of adding
language
skills
.
Although
, in my, opinion the positives outweigh the negatives.
Firstly
, there are many positive aspects of including another
language
 in the early development years for children. A number of studies have shown that it can increase cognitive function and support flexible thinking. The research
additionally
 shows it can boost problem-solving, critical thinking, listening
skills
, concentration and the ability to multitask. On the whole, these are all valuable
skills
 to develop.
Secondly
, learning another
language
 can
also
 be easier during younger years compared to an adult
due to
 brain plasticity. A child might
second
 guess themselves less when it comes to speaking and pronunciation, compared to an adult who is most likely more conscious and scared of failure.
On the other hand
, some might argue that a
second
language
 can overshadow the learning of the first
language
. The belief is that it will interfere with the child’s development, and inhibit
for example
 their English
skills
. That it would for an instance, confuse the child in what
language
 to use and they will start mixing words.
However
, when
this
 occurs it tends to go away with time. In conclusion, even though there are some unfavourable aspects of early bilingualism I still believe that there are far more positives in terms of long-term benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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