A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In especially concerning medical
this
century, there are a
countless Correct article usage
apply
number of
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people
that are showing interest in what concerne
Correct your spelling
concerns
animals
rights, Change noun form
animals'
animal's
therefore
it is becoming an actual and argued topic.
People
are starting to look disapprovingly all
situations and events with animal exploitation. Change preposition
at all
Infact
, Correct your spelling
In fact
circus
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the circus
for
example, has lost its popularity and the audience prefer human performances.
Add the comma(s)
,for
Moreover
, animal rights have become part of the law and animal’s
abuse is punished with fees and occasionally with prison.
Change noun form
animal
Further more
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
also
the
animal breeding has been observed and Correct article usage
apply
people
are realizing that the killing and the slaughter of animals is
cruelly done. It is important to realize that Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
of new generations are developing a new sensibility concerning this
issue, but currently
it is emerging a new Add a comma
,currently
exstremist
thought.
Despite the huge number of Correct your spelling
extremist
vegeterian
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vegetarian
people
(which
the majority of them are following a new fashion), there are Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
people
with distorted views.
The area that worry
me most regards Change the verb form
worries
the
animal Correct article usage
apply
research
which allows considerable and important improvements in the
medical Correct article usage
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research
, therefore
in human walfare
. The animalist group are spreading wrong information , directly Correct your spelling
welfare
demaging
the Correct your spelling
damaging
imaging
research
sector. As an illustration, few
months ago an animalist group destroyed years and years of neurological Change the article
a few
research
freeing rats used in a laboratory,
because they would have been cruelly treated. Remove the comma
apply
Unfortunately
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,Unfortunately
this
animalists did not know that Correct determiner usage
these
for
each treatment was used anesthesia.
Given these points, I defend animal rights and I do not support any form of animal exploitation , Change preposition
apply
nevertheless
I do not support any Add a comma
,nevertheless
exetremist
thoughtCorrect your spelling
extremist
Add the comma(s)
,
research
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