A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
century, there are
a
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countless
number of
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people
that are showing interest in what
concerne
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concerns
animals
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animals'
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rights,
therefore
it is becoming an actual and argued topic.
People
are starting to look disapprovingly
all
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situations and events with animal exploitation.
Infact
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,
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for
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example, has lost its popularity and the audience prefer human performances.
Moreover
, animal rights have become part of the law and
animal’s
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animal
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abuse is punished with fees and occasionally with prison.
Further more
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,
also
the
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animal breeding has been observed and
people
are realizing that the killing and the slaughter of animals
is
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cruelly done. It is important to realize that
people
of new generations are developing a new sensibility concerning
this
issue, but
currently
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it is emerging a new
exstremist
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extremist
thought. Despite the huge number of
vegeterian
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vegetarian
people
(
which
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the majority of them are following a new fashion), there are
also
people
with distorted views. The area that
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me most regards
the
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animal
research
which allows considerable and important improvements in
the
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medical
research
,
therefore
in human
walfare
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welfare
. The animalist group are spreading wrong information , directly
demaging
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damaging
imaging
the
research
sector. As an illustration,
few
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months ago an animalist group destroyed years and years of neurological
research
freeing rats used in a laboratory
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because they would have been cruelly treated.
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this
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animalists did not know that
for
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each treatment was used anesthesia. Given these points, I defend animal rights and I do not support any form of animal exploitation ,
nevertheless
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I do not support any
exetremist
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extremist
thought
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especially concerning medical
research
.
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