A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people

that are showing interest in what

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animals

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rights,

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it is becoming an actual and argued topic.

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situations and events with animal exploitation.

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example, has lost its popularity and the audience prefer human performances.

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, animal rights have become part of the law and

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abuse is punished with fees and occasionally with prison.

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animal breeding has been observed and

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of new generations are developing a new sensibility concerning

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it is emerging a new

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the majority of them are following a new fashion), there are

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animal

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. The animalist group are spreading wrong information , directly

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months ago an animalist group destroyed years and years of neurological

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because they would have been cruelly treated.

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animalists did not know that

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each treatment was used anesthesia. Given these points, I defend animal rights and I do not support any form of animal exploitation ,

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especially concerning medical

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Topic Vocabulary:

Exploitation
Animal welfare
Ethical treatment
Vegetarianism
Veganism
Cognitive dissonance
Humane
Live stock
Cruelty-free
Bioethics
Conservation
Habitat preservation
Ecosystem
Biodiversity
Animal testing
Synthetic biology
Genetic engineering
Speciesism
Animal husbandry
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