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in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online witthout paying.

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It is often predicted that in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because you would be able to read anything on your
phone
 without paying a single dollar. I completely agree with
this
 statement and think that our phones will be where we watch the
news
 or read from. First of all, most people these days are on their
phone
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 for the better part of their day, so it’s much easier for them to search on google, where you can access any
news
 channel for free like CNN
,
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 than to go look for a
newspaper
. You can
also
 find a bunch of
news
 by accident scrolling on social media.
For example
, the other day I was on
instagram
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 when I found out that the legendary football player Pele passed away.
Secondly
, these days
its
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it's
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 way easier to watch the
news
 than to go buy a
newspaper
. The feeling of opening your
phone
 and seeing the
news
 immediately feels way more pleasant than to go look for a
newspaper
.
For instance
, you can see the
news
 from your
phone
any time
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 and
any where
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. But the only place and time where I see new papers these days
is
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 when I’m in a hotel or I’m travelling on a plane.
To conclude
, I think that in 15 to 20 years newspapers are going to be fully extinct because of
peoples
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 screen time on their phones and because
its
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it's
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 way easier to watch the
news
 on your
phone
 than to buy a
newspaper
.
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