Nowadays many people wear western clothes rather than their traditional clothes. What are the reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development?

In
this
modern era, many individuals prefer to wear trendy
designs
more than their cultural
outfits
. There are several facts for wear fashionable
outfits
. Some part of the population argued that
this
is good,
while
other
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others
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argives
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argued
it is bad.
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my opinion is,
its
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it is
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a great influence in
this
changing world. In
this
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I'll discuss
the
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both sides.
To begin
with the positive side, It is comfortable compared to traditional
outfits
.
For instance
, You will be needing yards of fabrics to drape if you are wearing a traditional costume in Sri Lanka. Compared to a modernized outfit
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difficult to drape a saree if you are in a rush.
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it takes
alot
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a lot
of time and
practise
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practice
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to dress
a
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saree.
Therefore
many women in Sri Lanka are happy to dress
modern
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in modern
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designs
as it is
connvienient
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convenient
for them.
Furthermore
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western
designs
are upgrading all the time with the current trends.
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most of the ladies love to wear these to stand out among others.
On the other hand
, there are
few
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negative
delelopments
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developments
too.
For example
, in
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lanka
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you may not
allowed
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be allowed
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to dress
modern
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in modern
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outfits
for religious places like temples. But people don't realize the issue. They are
interseted
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interested
in wearing
there
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modern
designs
to temples. Because most of them cannot select
there
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outfits
according to
the situation. In
concusion
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conclusion
concussion
,
this
eassay
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discussed the positive development of wearing westernised
designs
than the traditional
designs
outweigh its negative development.
Nevertheless
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it will make your
day to day
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day-to-day
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life more easier and
comfirtable
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comfortable
.
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