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Internet has changed our lives and economies besides turning our world into a global village . To what extent do u agree ?

#internet #lives #economies #world #village
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At present time, we are so
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 that it has changed our lives and economies
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 turning our world into a global village.
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, everybody will think and behave in the same way. I completely agree with
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 has become a part and parcel of our life. Certainly
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 has made our life more easy and
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comfortable than we could ever imagine. Our life is fully dependent on
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. From waking up from bed in the morning and going to sleep at night, we can't
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 a single moment without
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 .
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also
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play
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 a vital role in
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 sector , medical sector and many more. Earlier,students had to be dependent on
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teacher
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 for teaching but now, they can learn anything and can clear their
confusions
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 from
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,it
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 keeps us updated about international affairs. But it didn't only
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 our lives but
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economies
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. Because of
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,
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unemployed people are not unemployed anymore. They can earn huge
amount
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 of money through freelancing with the help of
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.
By
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 the help of
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, we can communicate with our relatives sitting in any corner of the world .
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, it
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 helped us to know unknown people,
to
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 communicate with the people of other countries. Through
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 , we can know the culture and
tradition
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 of other countries. We can know how they think and can know their views.
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has
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lessen
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 our distance and
turn
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 our world into a global village .
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,
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 played a huge role to improve our lives and economies and it is still doing. Because of exchanging views and getting familiar with other cultures through
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 , everybody will think and act in the same.
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