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Space exploration is too much expensive and the money should be spent on more important things

#space #exploration #money
People have different views about
have
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 government should measure their countries'
progress
.
While
 space exploration is of course essential, I agree with those who believe that other measures of
progress
 are just as important. There are three
keys
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 reasons why exploration growth is seen as a fundamental goal for countries.
Firstly
, a healthy economy results in job creation, a high level of employment, and better salaries for all citizens.
Secondly
,
economic
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 ensures that more money is available for
government
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 to spend on infrastructure and public service.
For instance
, a government with higher revenues can invest in the
country
's transport network, its education system and its hospitals.
Finally
, a strong economy can help a
country
's standing on the global stage, In terms of its political influence and trading power.
However
, I would argue that various other forms of
progress
 are just as significant as the economic factors mentioned above. Perhaps, another key consideration when judging the
progress
 of a modern
country
 should be how well that
country
 protects the natural environment, and whether it is moving towards environmental sustainability. Alternatively, the success of
population
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 could be measured by looking at the health, well-being and happiness of its residents In conclusion, I believe that
rest
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action
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actions
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 of
progress
 are just valuable
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