All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school.’ How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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globalization era, having fluent bilingual languages is one of the most popular skills in the
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market.
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of Education should be settled foreign
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education system from child care. Personally, It seems to me that
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as
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as
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foreign
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enormous advantages, and I will explain
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why. First of all, having second
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is
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asset. In
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, Companies tend to hire multilingual candidates first
due to
globalization. Especially in multinational companies and huge organizations,
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high rate
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salary
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effortlessly. For example, working as an accountant position, having few languages, in
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company,
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salary than in others.
Moreover
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side of
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time. The researchers assume that
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side of the brain is responsible for
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children between the
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of 2 and 7
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the highest ability to learn in
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humans
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. Starting to Learn
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language
from those ages is more effective
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more
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likely native speaker and
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efficient
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the
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left-brain functions
such
as numbers skills, logic, written, analytic thought and reasoning. The final important reason why broadens children’s
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.
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language
brings
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of benefits
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personal development.
For instance
, multi-
language
children enhance their social skills, introduce new
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and new experiences and communicate with outside of
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. I do appreciate that some people think differently, saying that children
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have to learn their mother
language
fluently before
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language
.
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language
is important, of course, I feel they can able to learn
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both
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languages
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same
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time.
To conclude
, it seems that learning
new
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language
in early childhood is more
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, not just for fluent speaker but
also
for their
further
career pathway and brain and personal development reasons. We should prepare world
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.
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