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Many offenders commit more crime after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening and what can be done to tackle this problem?

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A generation ago, crime was too low compared with
this
 modern times.
However
, people are doing more crimes frequently after getting the first punishment.
This
 essay will look at the core reasons for
this
 and propose some solid solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
 is that the first punishment is not so high. By
this
 I mean, criminals got the average sentence of judgment from the court to stay inside the
jail
 .
For example
 , they received a little bit of torture,and a small number of meals, giving them to walk in
while
 they were imprisoned. Another
problem
 is that nowadays bribe is available inside the
jail
 .
This
 is to say, undeveloped countries often happen in prison cells receiving money from criminals to release them or give them good facilities by ignoring the punishments. A
third
 issue of the
problem
 is the lack of education facilities.To be more precise, criminals are not educated or they didn't have knowledge of the difference between right and wrong.
As a result
 ,they committed various types of crime.
However
 , the solution for the above issues is to take a higher sentence of time needed to live in
jail
 , 3rd level of torture, and no meals
then
 maybe they can stop doing crimes
second
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 time.
Secondly
,The government should be strict with the police officers and place cameras in every
jail
 to keep monitoring the activities.
Also
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 police officers have to focus on offenders to give them the proper education inside the
jail
 to make them good human beings.
To sum up
, because of the low awareness of government crimes is increasing,
due to
 the reasons
such
 as low punishment, bribes, bad education system. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
problem
 lies with the government and the police by taking more strict restrictions on the prison.
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