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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.

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These days, boarding
schools
, where
students
 have to stay all the
time
 during a term, are increasing in popularity
in
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worldwide. Even though some people do not support
this
 idea of living at the school.
This
 essay will discuss both aspects of the debatable issue and explain why it appears that a good option is not been the type of
schools
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 for pupils. On the one hand, the benefits of
this
 idea appear to be overwhelmingly positive.
To begin
,
students
 who live away from
the
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school tend to stuck in traffic
jam
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nevertheless
 when they
have existed
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 at boarding school, pupils can spend
time
to
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only
study
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.
Furthermore
, learners are usually under the supervision of
advisor
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, ensuring a well-disciplined daily routine. An example can be seen in
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Philippine
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, where plenty of boarding
schools
 exist and have mighty regulations.
Finally
, children would acquire knowledge of how to be independent.
On the other hand
, there is another group of those who
opposed
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 the idea of boarding
schools
 because of several
drawback
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 of
such
schools
. The most crucial reason is
students
 need to bond
time
 with their family during the academic year. Spending quality
time
 with parents is essential for teenagers, as it has a gigantic impact on their character and attitude.
Moreover
, to live
separate
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 from their relatives, is that some
students
 might
be
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harmful
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 effect on others.
As a result
, those who
felt
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bullying
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 tend to
be
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skip classes and become bad habits.
Overall
, it is sensible
to conclude
 that, pupils should stay with their family and go to regular
schools
 rather than boarding
schools
.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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