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some people like to spend their liesure time after work with their coworkers while others like to keep their private life separate from work. Discuss both sides.

#people #liesure #time #work #coworkers #life
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 how
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families
 spent their weekly income in one country for the given time ( 1968
and2018
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and 2018
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overall
, almost much of their
expesis
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expenses
 in 1968 is on food and housing
while
 in 2018 their spent are on leisure and housing ,so we can see that housing is a common feature in both years. in 1968, the
highst
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highest
 spent is on food
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 just above 35
precent
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per cent
 .
in addition
, housing ,clothing and
footware
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footwear
 are slightly above 10
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wherease
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whereas
 fuel ,power,household goods, personal goods transport and leisure are all between 5 and 10
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. on the other hand, in 2018 most of
femilies
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families
 expenses are on leisure ,which is almost 23
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,
also
,food and housing come
secondly
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 to
leisuer
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leisure
where
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 it situated between 15 and 20
percent
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.
however
, the lowest
spent
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 of
this
 year is fuel,power,household, personal goods,
clthing
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clothing
 and transport which cost them from just under 15 to 5 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • colleagues
  • team-building activities
  • work-life balance
  • socialize
  • networking
  • boundary
  • privacy
  • personal relationships
  • stressful
  • detrimental
  • efficiency
  • distractions
  • professionalism
  • segregation
  • personal time
  • maintain relationships
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