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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem?

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In the contemporary world, one of the most important issues that countries face is the waste of
food
. It is a fact that overconsuming became a culture in modern life
due to
 over-manufacturing. There are some quiet possible causes and quiet solutions that I will mention in
further
 stages On the one hand, there is a fact to bear in mind, mushrooming restaurants all over the world bring a bad culture called over-consuming.
For example
, people buy
food
 more than their need.
hence
, a lot of
food
 is wasted.
Moreover
, they do not bring
food
that is
 left in restaurants. After the industrial revolution, the production of different products has been changed.
This
 process gets an immense speed more than ever.
On the other hand
,
due to
 the government's attention to the production field, and the incomes they would have from the production, they allocate more funds to
this
. despite, all the adverse consequences. Nowadays, some environmental groups, work on the improvement of these kinds of cultures.
Also
, governments ought to support these groups in their activities. Some western governments are releasing the importance of nature in earth's future, and
for
this
 reason, they invest to survive the planet's heritage.
To sum up
, all the aforementioned points can bring us to the conclusion that, the earth's future depends on human beings' consumption behaviour more than in the past. Governments should invest in internalizing the thrift culture by educating people from their childhood in schools.
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