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Philippines is over populated country in Asia. Do you agree or disagree?

#philippines #country #asia
The process describes the way of gathering relevant weather forecasts.
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 up-to-the-minute
information
obtained
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 by
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the Australian
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 Bureau of Meteorology.
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, the fastest
information
 for broadcasting can pass through three steps. Meanwhile, some
information
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broadcasting
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the broadcasting
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 system slowly by passing in five ways. From the Satellite, the
information
 is
being
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analyzed via satellite photo, and after the
preparation
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,preparation
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 it is broadcast on TV, radio and
recored
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recorded
record
announcement
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announcements
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.
Similarly
with
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drifting
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a drifting
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 buoy
that it
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has 3 steps, which
it
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will
filtered
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 by
synoptic
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a synoptic
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 chart and delivered on TV, radio and telephone
announcement
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announcements
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 after the preparation. There is
also
 incoming
information
 from
radar
 which undergo through
radar
 screen before preparing
it
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for broadcast,
next
 it can be seen or
hear
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heard
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 on
different
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the different
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 weather news report.
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with
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radar
information
which
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passes by
synoptic
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a synoptic
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 chart,
then
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is then
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 prepared for broadcasting and will be aired on different devices.
Subsequently
, the slowest way of gathering
information
 is from
satelite
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satellite
 via
radar
 and analyzed via synoptic chart and ready for broadcast prior
relaying
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 it on TV, radio and
recored
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recorded
record
 announcement.
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