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Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion

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The existance of private schools leads to different speculations in community. Some of the
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 considered private
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 could be beneficial for the future,
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, there are
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 who thinks the opposite way. The majority difference in private
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 can lead to several downside opinion. As there are advantages and disanvantages that leads to the controversy of private schools, in
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 essay I will break down from the both sides. Being in private
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 is slightly different from the public
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. As in the funding in private
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 doesn't come from the goverment but it is paid by private individual income regularly.
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, they have more freedom in setting the academic authority as long as it's still in line with the curriculum,
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 could leads for bigger chance of the students development.
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 that, the amount of students in private
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 is less in comparison, so it could affect the effectiveness of studying in each classes. Several
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 thinks that private
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 is the best choice as they seek for the best education not minding the cost that they had to pay. Altough some
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 thinks that private
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 leads to downside in community. With the establishment of private schools, they tend to compare all aspects,
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 as: financial ability,
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 facilities, obligations, etc.
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 factors could overcome to social aspects jealousy.
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: In the competition, there is one student from private
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 who wears good uniform and she got full suport from the teacher,
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 the other one from the public
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 wears free outfit and got no support by the teacher nor the
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. The presence of private
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 is not a problem as society have choices to choose between private or public
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. As long as there are more advantages than the disadvantages, the establishment of private
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 could be continued. In a nutshell, the aspect that leads to the downside of private
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 should be accommodated and handled by the competent authority so that private
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 can be more accepted in society.
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