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Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion

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The existance of private schools leads to different speculations in community. Some of the
people
 considered private
school
 could be beneficial for the future,
however
, there are
people
 who thinks the opposite way. The majority difference in private
school
 can lead to several downside opinion. As there are advantages and disanvantages that leads to the controversy of private schools, in
this
 essay I will break down from the both sides. Being in private
school
 is slightly different from the public
school
. As in the funding in private
school
 doesn't come from the goverment but it is paid by private individual income regularly.
Therefore
, they have more freedom in setting the academic authority as long as it's still in line with the curriculum,
this
 could leads for bigger chance of the students development.
Besides
 that, the amount of students in private
school
 is less in comparison, so it could affect the effectiveness of studying in each classes. Several
people
 thinks that private
school
 is the best choice as they seek for the best education not minding the cost that they had to pay. Altough some
people
 thinks that private
school
 leads to downside in community. With the establishment of private schools, they tend to compare all aspects,
such
 as: financial ability,
school
 facilities, obligations, etc.
This
 factors could overcome to social aspects jealousy.
For example
: In the competition, there is one student from private
school
 who wears good uniform and she got full suport from the teacher,
while
 the other one from the public
school
 wears free outfit and got no support by the teacher nor the
school
. The presence of private
school
 is not a problem as society have choices to choose between private or public
school
. As long as there are more advantages than the disadvantages, the establishment of private
school
 could be continued. In a nutshell, the aspect that leads to the downside of private
school
 should be accommodated and handled by the competent authority so that private
school
 can be more accepted in society.
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