You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses. Write a letter to the school. In your letter ​•​ask about the school ​•​say what kind of accommodation you want ​•​mention any special requests you have (for example diet).

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
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letter to express my interest in studying abroad. My friend suggested that Richderson School is one of the most popular schools in Canada. I would be grateful if you could provide more information regarding the programs, scholarships and the classes. I have a keen interest in Computer Science and I am eager to know the availability of diplomas related to
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field.
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the courses, I
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need to know the process of enrollment, estimated tuition fees and the due dates for everything. Moving ahead, I was thinking of booking a hostel room for me in advance to avoid any
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-minute pressure. I need assistance in advance booking
as well as
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in the payment transactions. After visiting Canada, everything will be new for me in college,
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, it would be beneficial for me if you could provide me with
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a helping
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hand in finding my room and classes. I have one more request for you and
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regarding my eating habits. I came to know that food services will be provided by the college. I usually consume a balanced diet
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recommended by my doctor.
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, is
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possible
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your school could give me a specific food based on my needs
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I am willing to pay extra for it.
This
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is all I want to know. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Dilpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your letter better. Each paragraph should focus on one idea.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly indicate your requests, so they stand out.
positive
Your tone is polite and friendly, which is great for a letter.
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You asked clear questions about courses and accommodations.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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