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In some areas of the US, a "curfew" is imposed in which teenagers are not allowd to be out of doors after a paticular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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The safety of children is a major concern for both parents and the government. In certain parts of the United States, a
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 time is set, where the young are not permitted outdoors, except when they have a grown-up escort.
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 is beneficial from the
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 of benefits for the teenager and safety. Controlling minors' freedom after a certain time at
night
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 can benefit them more than you can imagine. In the first place, minors are very likely to have school early in the morning, and they should be
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 to make the most out of it. A good
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 of sleep has a direct impact on children's education and willingness to learn
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 being essential for young people to
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. Imposing
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restriction
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 avoids teenagers to go out when they should be resting,
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. Restrictions by governments are necessary, and they always serve society for
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.
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Night
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night life
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 can be thought of as synonymous
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 parties and drugs.
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 reason, it can be dangerous or not appropriate for a minor to be out alone at
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.
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, a teenager alone at
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 could be more willing to engage in bad activities,
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 as dealing illegal drugs and making bad friendships. To summarize, imposing a
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 on minors' freedom during
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night time
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nighttime
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 provides benefits, and I believe it is necessary to ensure their safety and well-being.
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,
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restriction
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 can improve teenagers' development towards education and itself.

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