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children born to one woman and the average age of women when they had their first child

#children #woman #age #women #first #child
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The 2 pictures provide averages for the
children
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 number of one woman and the age of females who gave birth to their first child, for the
period
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 1920-2019 in the
UK
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 and
Kazakhstan
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 as well.
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, it is clear even though
Kazakhstan
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 women like to have more
children
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 than
Uk
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 in the whole
period
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,
however
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, women of both nations used to have more
children
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 and get pregnant at a younger age during the past century. In the term of the average mother’s
children
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 in both the
Uk
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 and
Kazakhstan
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, we notice that the tendency of having more than 3
children
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 in 1920 is prevalent in
Kazakhstan
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, meanwhile,
Uk
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 mothers were more likely into 2
children
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 in the same
period
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,
however
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,
that is
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 not the case in 2019, The female trend
at the end
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 of the
period
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 is to have 3 and almost 2
children
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 for both
Kazakhstan
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 and
Uk
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 respectively, albeit, the gradual spike of
children
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 number in the 40s and 60s was surprisingly
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