Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion
It is true that private
schools
have become a huge sectore
of any educational system all over the world, whether in developed or developing countries, Correct your spelling
sector
while
it has many postive
effects on the community, it has Correct your spelling
positive
also
a negative side, I would argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin
with, why private schools
took the attention and had this
growth in recent years, the obvious reason is that people Add a missing verb
have loss
loss
trust in Replace the word
lost
the
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apply
education
and public schools
by
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over
the
time, Correct article usage
apply
for example
in Egypt people prefer to make their children study in privates schools
rather than public ones through all education
periods. It will lead us to the advantages of this
trend, firstly
, it will serve the
society by providing qualified workers had a Correct article usage
apply
high quality
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high-quality
education
, as a result
, this
workforce could accomplish the develpment
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development
for
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of
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the economic
economic
and all other sectors. Replace the word
economy
For example
, in Japan, the skilled workers who had perfect education
make the country in
the front line.
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on
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of private education
and the malignant effect on society are shown on many sides. Firstly
, it raises feelings of discrimination against poor
class, Correct article usage
the poor
for instance
, there is a theory in Egypt that only the offspring of the rich class can afford the fees of private schools
, as
a result, more careless toward public Correct word choice
and as
schools
. Secondly
, it has become a source of investment not
a vital Add the comma(s)
,not
sectore
for the nation to care about, Correct your spelling
sector
sectors
for example
, some private schools
pay huge taxes and raise the fees to make a profit, no matter the quality of subjects or enhancing
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enhancement
students
services.
In conclusion, Change noun form
students'
student's
while
private schools
have some drawbacks and some minor effects on the
society, in the Correct article usage
apply
end
I see that the advantages outweigh the disadvantagesAdd the comma(s)
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