Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion

It is true that private
schools
have become a huge
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sector
of any educational system all over the world, whether in developed or developing countries,
while
it has many
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positive
effects on the community, it has
also
a negative side, I would argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin
with, why private
schools
took the attention and had
this
growth in recent years, the obvious reason is that people
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trust in
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free
education
and public
schools
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time,
for example
in Egypt people prefer to make their children study in privates
schools
rather than public ones through all
education
periods. It will lead us to the advantages of
this
trend,
firstly
, it will serve
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society by providing qualified workers had a
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education
,
as a result
,
this
workforce could accomplish the
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and all other sectors.
For example
, in Japan, the skilled workers who had perfect
education
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the front line.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of private
education
and the malignant effect on society are shown on many sides.
Firstly
, it raises feelings of discrimination against
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class,
for instance
, there is a theory in Egypt that only the offspring of the rich class can afford the fees of private
schools
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a result, more careless toward public
schools
.
Secondly
, it has become a source of investment
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a vital
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sector
sectors
for the nation to care about,
for example
, some private
schools
pay huge taxes and raise the fees to make a profit, no matter the quality of subjects or
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services. In conclusion,
while
private
schools
have some drawbacks and some minor effects on
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society, in the
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I see that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
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