The given maps illustrate the evolution of two neighbouring regions between over a period of 50 years.

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The given maps illustrate the evolution of two neighbouring regions

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over a period of 50 years.

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, between 1962 and now we can see huge developments, with many facilities added

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, roads were built to connect the regions. From 1963 to 1985 the west side of the map had several changes. A housing state was added north-west of the region and slightly to the south a superstore was built. Between these facilities was constructed a road that goes

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north

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, located east of the leisure complex that was built. The same road was extended to

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, passing by Fonton, which had no

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facilities

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constructed. Between 1985 and now, the Meadowside was transformed

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a suburb, but no building was added.

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, in Fonton several developments happened over

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period. South of the road a business park was erected and north of both, a train station was built. Slightly north-east of these

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a Hotel was added.

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