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Some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #friends
Making
friends
 and maintaining a good relationship with them is the most critical part of anyone’s
life
. These critical
part
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 would be easy when we find
mates
 with similar
thoughts
,
opinions
, likes and ideas. Some argue that rather than having
likeminded
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mates
 it is adequate to have those who
opposes
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oppose
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 our
thoughts
 when the
opinions
 are
in
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an
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unlikely
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 manner. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 I strongly believe that we should have
friends
 who disagree with our
opinions
 when we are likely to be having wrongful ideas,
thoughts
 or
opinions
.
Firstly
, having
friends
 with similar
ideology
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,
opinions
, likes and
thoughts
 in
the
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life
 is a must and foremost thing. Because whenever we need second
thought
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thoughts
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 in
life
 to decide
few
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a few
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 actions over
the
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 critical or simple situation we seek one of our best
mates
 just to ensure that what would have someone with similar thinking had addressed the situation and
also
 we seek support
to
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 our idea.
Consequently
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 it will be boosting our energy to convert
whatever
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our
thoughts
,
ideas
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and ideas
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 into meaningful actions which will be helping in building our successful lifestyle.
On the other hand
, we should
also
 consider
mates
 to act
accordingly
, what is right for the situation rather than blindly supporting our
thoughts
 because
having
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 similar tastes. We should all have
friends
 who daringly correct
out
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our
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thoughts
 whenever it is misleading
into
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a
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the
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 wrong direction. Because thinking in the opposite way
prepare
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ourselves
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us
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to
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for
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worst
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 conditions
also
.
To conclude
although
 opting
friends
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for friends
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 with similar
thoughts
 is good,
but
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it is not advisable to have them.
Therefore
 we should have
mates
 with similar
thoughts
 and daring
attitude
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attitudes
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 to disagree
us
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with us
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 whenever it is required in our
life
.
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  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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